5. The enrollment rate of the pupils to junior high school was 97.9 percent, rising 0.88 percentage points.

問題：rise為不及物動詞，正式說法為rising by 0.88 percentage points。

6. The number of the teachers and staff members in primary schools decreased slightly and the qualification rate of full-time teachers was on the rise.

問題：the number of后接的名詞一般不帶定冠詞，應(yīng)改為the number of teachers and staff members。這個問題多次出現(xiàn)。

7. There were 6,256,200 teachers and staff members in primary schools in the country, decreasing 84,000 from previous year.

問題1：previous year屬于特指，其前應(yīng)加定冠詞the。

問題2：應(yīng)把decreasing 84,000改為decreasing by 84,000。

8. The qualification rate of full-time teachers of primary school was 97.85 percent, rising 0.46 percentage points over the previous year.

問題：primary school應(yīng)改為primary schools。

順便一提的是，譯者似乎意識到了冠詞的使用問題，因此這里的previous year前加了定冠詞the。這么正式的文體中，為什么不能保持一致呢？

9. With the realization of the target of popularization of nine-year compulsory education and due to the decrease of the children at schooling age, the number of enrollment to junior high schools slightly declined.

問題1：With the realization of the target of popularization of nine-year compulsory education帶有很強的中式英語味，完全可以簡化為with the successful popularization of nine-year compulsory education。

問題2：“學齡”在英語中有固定表達方式school age。

10. But the number of students at school and students graduated from school increased.

問題：students graduated from school應(yīng)改為students graduating from school。事實上，這還不是地道的英語表達方式。上述說法完全可以簡化為graduates。

11. There were 64,700 junior high schools (including 1,019 vocational junior high schools), decreasing 1,000 from 2002.

問題1：根據(jù)英語的替代規(guī)則，括號里面的vocational junior high schools應(yīng)簡化為vocational ones。

問題2：與前面一樣，decreasing 1,000最好改為decreasing by 1,000。

12. The school conditions of junior high schools and primary schools were further improved.

 問題：the school conditions中的school顯然多余。

13. 50.2 percent of primary schools and 65.68 junior high schools had their sport fields or gymnasium reached targeted area; 38.66 percent of primary schools and 53.95 percent of junior high schools had their musical instruments meet the requirements; 36.69 percent of primary schools and 52.43 percent of junior high schools had their fine art fittings reached the target respectively; 49.8 percent of primary schools and 70.17 percent of junior high schools had their mathematical and experimental instruments reach the target respectively.

問題1：65.68 junior high schools不符合英語省略習慣，應(yīng)改為65.68 of junior high schools。

問題2：該句譯文中一處使用had their sport fields or gymnasium reached targeted area，另一處又使用had their musical instruments meet the requirements，即have在有的地方后面接動詞過去分詞，而有的地方又接動詞原形，說明譯者對have的用法沒有把握。事實上，這里從語意上來說，不論使用have + something + v.還是 have + something + v-ed的表達方式都不符合英語表達習慣。

問題3：把“運動場”翻譯成sport field似乎不符英語表達習慣，應(yīng)改為playground或sports venue。

問題4：為什么reached targeted area中不加定冠詞，而reached the target中確加冠詞？顯然譯文隨意性太強。而且這種動賓搭配似乎也不符合英語習慣。譯文中這種隨意使用定冠詞的情況非常普遍，如在接下來的說明特殊學生“上學”比例的一句中，就有at the school，in the school，at special school，at school幾種說法。